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2010年1月16日托福獨立寫作點評與示範
children should choose the jobs similar to their parents' or choose the jobs different from their parents.

Do you agree with this statement: It is better for children to choose the jobs of their parents?

名師點評:

本題按照題材分類屬於“父母,兒童教育和成長”類別中的父母與子女教育問題,在題庫中與此類似的題目有:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parents' generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

可以從題目的提問方式Do you agree ?看出本文題材屬於觀點選擇類即投票題目,此類題目要求觀點一定要明確,並對自己的觀點進行論述,通常只需要論述一方面就可以了,非常慶幸的是這次的題目與題庫中有類似的題目,如果努力複習的話對學生們是十分有利的。因此正文段可以採取體現文法的1+1結構:

開頭段:

背景描述+表明觀點

很明顯,在大部分家庭當中給孩子影響最大的應該是父母了,(Obviously, in most cases the earliest teachers people have are their parents, and parents are generally most concerned about the development of their children.)這種影響不僅體現在孩子們的早期學習和性格培養,同樣也體現在孩子的前程,具體表現為工作選擇(job selection)上, most of people 認為父母對於孩子理解最深(know kids very well),因此孩子們應該選擇與父母相似的職業,但是我並不這麼認為。

正文段:

兩段論

第一段

父母們在孩子早期教育起到了十分關鍵的作用,並期待孩子們從事相同的職業,能夠在孩子以後的發展上面給予一定的幫助。 When children are in the preliminary school, it is not surprising that parents are perhaps capable of teaching their children almost every subject even better than professional teachers in the school. 但是這種情況不會長久,尤其是到了高等教育階段,孩子們逐漸形成了自己的性格和強項以及專業,父母雖然心地善良,對於孩子的教育和專業卻有可能一無所知。 But the situation will not last long. No parent is able to be professional in all fields, though they might be experts in one or more fields. 可以舉一兩個名人的例子,或者用自己親人的經歷來進行論證。 (例證法)

第二段

不是所有父母輩的工作都是好工作,大多數父母的工作總是會存在一些瑕疵,但是孩子們卻會慣性沿襲了父母們不好的習慣和經驗。 Not all professions engaged by their parents are good enough. . Even though parents almost instinctively devote themselves to cultivating their offspring, the outcome might turn out to be disappointment, for all children tend to unconsciously or subconsciously copy everything including bad ones from their parents.如果孩子們從事了與父母相同的職業,孩子們的社交圈還有專業會與父母一樣,這樣孩子就成為了父母的copy,完全喪失了自己的個性。

結尾段

重申觀點

In a word, it is rather better to select career which is different from parents.
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